Extended Practice Comic Pitch

Here is the line art for my collaborative comic pitch, I forgot to post it when I first did it but now looking back there's a lot that I want to change. I'm going to do another post with an annotated version of the comic pointing out each bit that needs changing. We've decided for the pitch we're going to have the art in black and white and focus on getting it to be perfect then we'll propose that we'd work with a colourist for the final cover here is my attempt at colouring the page which is okay but i don't think it makes the pages stronger so it made sense to focus on the line art.